Monday, April 11, 2016

LOOSE ENDS

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Today's prompt:  "write a poem in which you closely describe an object or place, and then end with a much more abstract line that doesn’t seemingly have anything to do with that object or place, but which, of course, really does."


Loose Ends

Just before the sun dips its toes in the bay
we make the pilgrimage to Daniel's-by-the-Sea
where tall blue bottles of tequila spill their contents
into shot glasses. Don't bother asking for mix,
or anything else, unless you bring it, which we don't.
Instead, we bring stories wrapped in guises
of fact, fiction, or something in-between
while pelicans dive and fly, 
skimming so close to breaking surf
you'd swear they'll fall in, but no; 
only when they choose to
Dogs rush other dogs rush other dogs,
large, small, doesn't matter—they just want to play.
A fisherman casts his net.
Eventually the sun sets. Glasses empty. 
The world goes away. 
In Lahore, a suicide bomber takes out a park. 


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21 comments:

Lynda said...

Wonderful!

De said...

Perfection. Exactly the spirit of the Wright poem. Seriously. This is what I had hoped to accomplish. So good.

Linda Crosfield said...

Thank you both!

Elizabeth Hornor Boquet said...

Wow! That works wonders!

Judy Dykstra-Brown said...

Congratulations, Linda! Sounds familiar!!!I can see you are definitely off your writing hiatus...

grapeling said...

the fine details and the denouement. well done ~

Crafty Green Poet said...

Not only is that an excellent poem, but it sums up life for so many of us, we 're doing our ordinary things while on the other side of the world (or sometimes closer to home) major incidents are occuring

Optimistic Existentialist said...

Great take on the prompt. Vividly written...I felt as if I was there :)

Cheers from Germany.

Claire said...

Lovely poem. And heartbreaking

musingsanddaydreams said...

Wow. That's left me breathless.

Jennifer A. Jilks said...

Well done.

Mary Hood said...

Drew me captive, then...reality. Wow. Excellent poem!

James Dudley said...

A very vivid and descriptive poem. I'm right there. Thanks for the journey.

Mama Zen said...

Wow. That's like a punch in the face. Well done.

quillfyre said...

Perfectly met challenge!

quillfyre said...

p.s. I see you are the featured blog at NaPoWriMo this morning! Brava!

James Dudley said...

Please unsubscribe

Linda Crosfield said...

Thank you, everyone! (James,sorry, I can't; I didn't subscribe you. Maybe you ticked the "email follow-up comments" box? At any rate, I suspect this thread is pretty much done.)

Bryan Ens said...

This is remarkably well done. The ending was a gut punch.

Suz said...

Beautifully done. I got chills!

Ashna said...

That's a thoughtful poem! Enjoyed reading it!